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Name: Akiu,Fox,KiR Country: United States State: Please select... Gender: Male
Interests: ART/GAMES/COMICS development Expertise: ART/GAMES/COMICS development Occupation: Artist Industry: Art
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I was wondering guys... Is there going to be anymore posts? Hey Vince
you should post something on here too we didn't get to see anything
from you on this blog yet 
<^o_O^>
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Here is a revise version of my prologue. Please criticize as much as you can please! That's the only way I will learn.
Prologue: Retsu
Christopher woke up the morning give a
daily glimpse of the newborn. Christopher was one of the caretaker’s sons. The
newborn, Lucia, was seen as the savior of
the crisis that the country is in ;
they believed she is the light to all their problems. Her eye shined in a brilliantly sweet blend
of green and grey that is never been seen before since the ruler that reign
many years ago, one of Lucia’s ancestors, Queen Achlys. The people of Antagon eye
color is either grey or green.
The son of a housekeeper, Christopher, each
day helped his mother with some errands. He watched his mother made breakfast
coffee. Every time, he begged his mother to take a sip of coffee only to find
out each moment his face twirled in the bitter taste. His mother laughed. After
breakfast, he helped polished the silverware, made the bed for the royal
family, crawled into the small cupboard and scrubbed the interiors, programmed
the daily country bulletin, and refined the old artifact of the family. Whenever Christopher had the chance, he would
visit Lucia in the nursery and be rewarded with a smile that filled him
joviality. He naturally felt the urge to keep that smile in Lucia’s face pure
and honest. Christopher is just three years old; he celebrated his youth day
after day and observed another.
The frontline of the civil war approached
palace treacherously close four months after Lucia was born. The birth of Lucia
was never announced publicly, coincidently the attack zeroed into the palace
precisely months after. The earsplitting thunder of the war was loud as it ever
was. Scared by the deafening clatter,
Christopher stayed with Lucia and kept himself company with her as the
atmosphere pack with ash and smoke. The
noise grew louder and louder as Lucia’s cry bolstered. The palace’s shields weakly
hindered the constant blows of rockets and lasers as it tower over the fallen
city. Suddenly, a rocket got through the barrier and wobbled the soaring construction.
The structure was giving in to the persistent abuse. Christopher did not know
what was going on. Christopher needed to get some help. Before he was able to
reach the door, the caretaker burst through panting in desperation. Sweating and gasping for air, the caretaker shouted
“The King and Queen are dead! We must
run, Christopher! The rebels killing everyone
that once served the Queen. We must run!
Christopher!” The caretaker instantaneously grabbed shocked Christopher and ran
off in terror.
“Luc-ia!”
Christopher jerked and pulled as he cried for her, “Aik! Lucs..!”
He could not free himself from his mother’s
strong grip. She held Christopher in one arm and ran into a forbidden corridor
escaping from harm’s way. Lucia stayed and shrieked in the small room that
slowly became bleak and shadowy from the outside fumes. The rebels eliminated her mother and
father. The country endured without a
leader being completely helpless.
Please criticize it! I welcome even the negative one haha.
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| CatalepsicFox's Drops
Hey
guy I'm starting to post up some old stuff and new stuff tonight. Here
is the first thing , I did while back. I played around with the
INNERKID logo and made it animate, I guess I was really bored back
then. Tonight I will post the final product of my watercolor for my
Lucia's Line story.
<^o_O^>
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| Jimboy911's Drop
“Sunset, In French with You,” said the railing as they sat by the waterfront overlooking the skyline. Next-door was a small fish market, abandoned for the night. To the right end of their panorama stood Brooklyn Bridge, but little mattered as their stomachs were enjoying the meal ordered to go in that small well-lit place just across the pond.
As the idle revs die down, silence nearly overtakes the two before her stomach growls a statement of gratitude.
I: Looks like someone’s talking to you.
D smiles and takes a deep breath of the cold air mixing in with the warmness occupying the inside of their car.
D: It’s so….romantic here. I: I wonder why the sign’s there. It’s a fishery. D: I guess whoever made this place knew that we’d be here. Hey, at least it gets the point across. P: You mean the sign exists because I want it to exist. D: Cover up the ‘n.’ P: Now that really doesn’t many much sense and I’m not gonna do a demonstration.
D shakes his head.
I: Never mind.
I uses her right hand to hold D by the throat, still icy cold even though she had them folded near her lap during the drive over.
D: Okay, okay…
Stepping outside, D walks up to the railing, crouches down, and covers up the ‘n.’ He then turns around to see her reaction.
“Sunset, I French with You,” the sign now said.
I smiles and reaches over to the center of the steering wheel to press the horn. The blast of noise causes D to jump back and hit his head on the railing.
I: Wow, nice going!
I steps out of the car and walks up behind D, now crouched, holding his head.
I: I have some ice. You know that.
D tries to ignore her and the pain, biting his lip; looking at her.
I caresses his cheek and pulls him close, her other hand presses against the swelling.
D looks at the fishery.
D: There’s ice in the fishery, we can break in there. But…this is good.
I: The night’s perfect, you know. No more demonstrations, though... Let’s see the damage.
I takes her hand off the point of impact. The cold air helped with the swelling a bit, but the gentle breeze singed his nerves.
I: You’re not bleeding; you’re still awake, so you’re fine.
I places her hand back on the ‘wound’ and draws him in close, his cheek coming into contact with her cheek.
D leans in, presses against her, and closes his eyes. He soon opens them slightly and tries to turn his head to look at the fishery.
I: No, stay here.
D: This isn’t exactly the best place to do this.
I: Just hold me.
I kept silent and held him there. Torsos turned with the center console in the way, they stayed and waited for the sun to surprise them. He no longer hurt and her hands were no longer cold.
=D
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